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Quiet as a Cat (flash fiction)

June 24, 2013

Photo of walking across piano keys

Be quiet as a cat.

How can I? Surely, they can hear my heartbeat echoing up the stairs, into their bedroom.

Deep breaths. Wear cheap socks you can buy anywhere, in case fibers are left behind. Walk like a cat across piano keys.

Fitting. Nice piano here. Nice things everywhere. Pritchard, you picked a good house. First job’s a big one. Don’t get cocky. Like Pritchard taught. Job’s not over yet.

You can’t miss it. Big abstract in the living room. No frame. Just pop off the staples holding the canvas to the frame, roll it up, slip right out.

So far, so good. How can a painting so ugly be worth so much? Just get on with these staples. Easier than cutting the window and pulling off the piece with suction cups and crawling through. No alarm bells. What was that? Creaking? Stairs? Oh God, he’s got a gun.


VisDare prompt given by Angela Goff at Anonymous Legacy. For other stories inspired by this photo, click here.
Photo source here
Story copyright Dave Williams

11 Comments leave one →
  1. June 24, 2013 8:01 am

    Very entertaining – and especially nice touches, like the socks..makes it interesting..

  2. June 24, 2013 11:38 am

    I love your take on the image.. It’s fantastic to see how everyone uses it.. I also like your writing style. Nice one..x

  3. June 24, 2013 11:59 am

    A very nice write…enjoyed how you developed the story.

  4. June 25, 2013 7:41 am

    Like the tension here.. also the passing thought, ‘How can a painting so ugly be worth so much?’

    • June 25, 2013 1:04 pm

      Thanks — I thought it was a natural thought for him to have during a robbery.

  5. June 25, 2013 8:13 am

    After watching too many CSI series… I wonder if the new theif wasn’t ‘set up’?
    I like the suspense here and the ‘uh-ho’ ending.

    • June 25, 2013 1:05 pm

      Could’ve been a set-up. That’s an interest read of the story. I like that it’s open-ended to have a couple different conclusions.

  6. June 25, 2013 9:15 am

    Really like the voice in this, the tension and attention to detail – like those cheap socks. Very imaginative use of the prompt.

  7. June 25, 2013 9:17 am

    Lovely piece full of tension, some great sentences too!

  8. June 26, 2013 10:40 pm

    LOVE this take on the prompt. All the tension, the rapid thinking, stealth, all mounting the suspense up to the cliffhanger ending — wonderfully crafted. Thanks for another great VisDare!

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