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June 5, 2013

Back to the fun Friday Fictioneers photo prompt and story. I’ve been away on vacation for a couple of weeks, and while I had a good time, it’s nice to get back to the weekly challenge of writing a story of only 100 words based on a photo. This week’s pic is a fun one, and I scratched my head for a while until an idea popped up.

Also, for those who requested a sequel to my last story (“Hidden”) about a boy and his Lab finding a strange whirring metal object in the weeds, I wrote a continuation in the original post. It was neat to draw out the story a little more.

 

Strange Animal, copyright El Appleby

The beast crashed through the jungle after the scientist, a far cry from its stealthy approach of the camp as he bent over his journal, sketching the day’s botanical finds and sipping claret. Computer’s beeping alerted him of the motion detector’s triggering the night-vision videocamera, and the screen displayed the beast in eerie green. The scientist gasped with the memory of an extinct animal’s illustration in a dusty book. He shot a tranquilizer, but it surged. He fled, leaving the grousing of formerly sleeping crewmates, who became grateful he led the beast away and for camera’s evidence of its existence.

 


Friday Fictioneers prompt given by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields. For other stories inspired by this photo, click here.
Photo copyright El Appleby
Story copyright Dave Williams

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19 Comments leave one →
  1. June 5, 2013 7:37 pm

    The Yeti of its time. I like this line: “The scientist gasped with the memory of an extinct animal’s illustration in a dusty book.” This part is a bit confusing: “who became grateful he led the beast away and the camera’s evidence of its existence.” This says he led both the beast and the camera away, which isn’t what I think happened. Maybe something like: “who were both grateful he led the beast away and for the photographic evidence of its existence.” Just a suggestion.

    janet

    • June 6, 2013 5:19 am

      Glad you liked it! This story was one of the tricky ones to edit down to 100 words — it was challenging to choose which words to keep and which to remove. I just added “for” in the last sentence… hope this clears up the confusion a bit.

  2. June 5, 2013 8:06 pm

    Glad you had a good vacation…what a fun way to return…a most entertaining story…thanks for the smiles.

  3. June 6, 2013 1:04 am

    Sometimes it is hard being a scientist!

  4. June 6, 2013 4:44 am

    Dear Dave,

    Welcome back. Good thing he had his alert system.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

  5. June 6, 2013 9:39 am

    Loved it, zooky, especially the grousing crewmates 😀

  6. June 6, 2013 10:36 am

    🙂 After such a goof up – did the scientist have any other recourse?

    i would be thankful if all their goof ups were restricted to FF. Love your take here.

    • June 7, 2013 4:22 pm

      Yeah, when faced with fight or flight, it made sense to make a run for it and hope for the best!

  7. June 6, 2013 2:39 pm

    The scientist is being chased by the creature…. then what? Enjoyed this a lot and another installment would be good.

    • June 7, 2013 4:23 pm

      I’ll have to let this stew a bit and see if inspiration strikes for a continuation… thanks for stopping by!

  8. June 6, 2013 3:06 pm

    I too enjoyed the illustration in the dusty book! I wonder if the scientist survived the chase…

  9. June 6, 2013 6:00 pm

    Enjoyed this, very entertaining
    Dee

  10. June 7, 2013 6:58 am

    Nice storytelling! I guess he was inadvertently taking one for the team.

  11. June 7, 2013 11:52 am

    Great flash – depth of characters in such a short piece.

  12. June 7, 2013 1:42 pm

    loved the action, great story. but i’d hate to think of what might’ve happened to the scientist 🙂 tough job

  13. petrujviljoen permalink
    June 8, 2013 12:30 pm

    Potential for adventurous scientists here I should think. I hope the zany animal eludes them a while longer.

  14. June 9, 2013 3:46 pm

    wonderful stoty and welcome back 🙂

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